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Post by TheVelocity on Mon May 27, 2013 7:32 am

OOC

Steam name:Velocity
Profile Name: jamesfx12
SteamID: STEAM_0:0:52795215
Age:13
How long have you been playing SlothGaming?:3 Weeks.
How long have you been roleplaying for?:I have been role-Playing for 2 years!
Why do you want to join the MPF?(1 paragraph):I want to join because I believe I can keep the streets of city 45 safe and the citizens from rebels/Anti-civilians. I could provide the MPF with some key essential skills like problems solving and team work.
Why does your character want to join the MPF?(1 paragraph):James wants to make a difference to the city he lives in, he doesn't want crime. He wants to keep his city's streets clean and make sure the citizens are safe and follow the basic guidelines. The streets are full of crime these days and unlike some people he wants to reduce this number and had peace at last in this once great, crime-free, City.
Do you have any previous MPF experience?: Unfortunately I do not.
Have you ever been banned, if yes explain why?: Thankfully I have not.

IC:

Name: James Archer
Age:20
Sex: Male
Weight:124
Height: 1.56
Why do you want to join the MPF?(2 paragraphs):I wish to join because I believe that the streets of city 45 are crawling with criminals and crime. Since I have lived in this city for one year now I believe I know the weak points and strong points of the city and What needs improving. I want the citizens to feel safe when they walk out of there homes, In this and past generations when civilians have walked out their doors they don't feel safe they have to peek around corners and look around before they leave.
I also want to join to protect the nexus and stop citizens doing things that might effect their health. For example going into the slums might be a bad idea because nobody knows what is down there and the rebel base is deep in the slums. If you citizens reach this base the rebels may tell them things which are not necessarily true, This could lead them to believe we are doing bad and we are the bad guys.
What do you hope to achieve in the MPF?(1 - 3 paragraphs): In the MPF I hope to gain a lot of skills and learn important life skills. I also want to feel proud in my self and what I have done, Like ensuring the citizens are safe and feel proud of my city in general.
I want to achieve essential skills like team work and socializing skills. If I achieve all of these things I think when and If I leave the MPF I will have gained irreplaceable skills for like, team work and problem solving. Then I will know I have done what I have been Intended to do and teach others the way I have been taught so in generations people of the future will know what type of skills we had and what type of people we were.
Name 5 things a MPF unit does every day?:
-Patrol
-Protect Civilians
-Guard the Slums
-Prevent Anti-Civilian activities
-Train (If high enough Rank)
Character backstory(2 - 4 paragraphs):

James was born on the 24th of May 1977. He lived with his parents and 2 other brothers in a small but stable town called UpHolland. When he was just 4 his mum died of suffocation after being trapped in a fallen down factory. His dad had to support him but his dad couldn't cope so he gave his other 2 children to a children home which left James a lonely child.

He was home schooled as his dad couldn't afford for him to go to school. He learnt a lot of his dad as his dad was a well taught man. He also learnt a few more things that normal school boys and girls wouldn't have learnt. When he was 13 he got a Saturday job which meant he could go to school and afford most things he couldn't afford before. At the age of 16 he met a girl name Sophie. He was with her until he was 18 when he proposed to her and to his shock she said yes.
When James was 20 he moved to city 12 to live a well deserved life as a business man for the city 12 CWU. After 4 months of living in city 12 he was chased out by debt as he didn't pay taxes. Him and Sophie then moved to city 40 which was what they always dreamed about but they soon found out about the city's major crime problem. They finally moved to city 45 where they remain today.

In the 7 hour war James fled to his home and hid there for a hour or so. After this hour he came out to the streets only to be held up at gunpoint by combines. He was held captive in his own home until a large portal storm started to appear close to his apartment. His apartment fell in on him lucky crushing the combines which guarded him, he escaped with his life. On the streets he wondered from shadow to shadow avoiding the combine and trying to flee the city. Unfortunately 7 hours after the war started earth was doomed, the combine had took control of this earth to protect it's secrets and make the citizens live their way of life.

Hope this is a lot better then my other tries, I tried to Improve on what comments I got.


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Post by marcin4646 on Mon May 27, 2013 8:12 am

Well, The application is good in my opinion
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Post by TheVelocity on Mon May 27, 2013 8:16 am

Thanks

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Post by Cypher on Mon May 27, 2013 9:00 am

Neutral, haven't see your roleplay

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Post by Grammar Nazi on Mon May 27, 2013 9:35 am

Velocity wrote: for future jobs and pass these skills onto somebody else.

-1 Because of this.

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Post by L30N on Mon May 27, 2013 9:40 am

-Support
He's only 1.4 feet tall (that's one and a half 30 cm rulers)
Terrible grammar
No "past generations" would have existed in the city.
You talk about leaving the MPF (in other words, going rogue) during the "What do you hope to achieve" section.
You imply you'll breach UPA (you talk about future generations)
You couldn't be born in 1977 and be twenty, the server is set in 2016.
Little-to-no mention of half life lore (add information on the Resonance Cascade.)
There wasn't any numbered cities until after the seven hour war, and they didn't move into said cities until just before it (just after the resonance cascade and before the seven hour war.)


P.S
Vaas, how's that custom rank coming? XD

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Post by Liverpoolfreak15 on Mon May 27, 2013 9:41 am

PLEASE bounce

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Post by Noliq on Mon May 27, 2013 9:41 am

Neutral not the best application and havent seen you RP.

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Post by Sloth the Wizard on Mon May 27, 2013 9:43 am

Neutral Never seen you on tbh
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Post by TheVelocity on Mon May 27, 2013 9:44 am

Sorry About all the mistakes, I will edit it tomorrow as soon as I can.

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Post by TheVelocity on Mon May 27, 2013 9:45 am

Sloth the Wizard wrote:Neutral Never seen you on tbh

Been having some computer problems they are fixed now, I will be on more regularly

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Post by Sinskitz on Mon May 27, 2013 9:50 am

Neutral Never seen you in game.

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Post by Sloth the Wizard on Mon May 27, 2013 10:29 am

Denied

This... 1.4 feet tall
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