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Post by Niebianski on Wed May 22, 2013 5:42 am

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Tell me a basic 4 line paragraph about the story of HL2:After blackmesa accident, Gordon Freeman has been awaken by gman, and sended to the city 17 - main city of combine. Firstly Freeman meets barney as a MPF and his old friend Doctor Kleiner from blackmesa. After this he meets Alyx Vance, a daughter of Eli Vance (he was also gordon's friend from blackmesa). When teleported sended him behind Kleiner's lab, he get's crowbar from Barney and trys to escape to the secret eli's lab while killing MPF's. Gordon made it, he came to the eli's Vance and meet Judith Mossman but after a hour, base has been scanned and bombarded by combine. Freeman has no choose, but he had to escape by old Ravenholm way.. He meets there Father Grigori then one, and only one survivor. Grigori sacrifaced hisself to give Gordon time to escape. When he came to the rebel base he's been informed by Alyx, her father were captured by combine to the Nova Prospect.
Gordon took a wheel and drived while he shooted antlions to the Nova Prospect. He meets Alyx dropping from train and they both trying to get Eli free. They're found a video between Mossman and doctor breen, it would seems she all the time traited for combine. After all Judith escaped with eli using teleport to the citadel - Gordon and Alyx went to the Kleiner's lab.
After two week big war started after destroying Nova prospect. While it Barney trying keeps rebels alive and Alyx has been captured by combine to the citadel.. Gordon with Alyx are destroyed citadel and shows Gman who gave congratulations for his hard work.


How are Vortigaunts envolved in HL2?: After Nihilanth death, vortigaunts came to earth and tried to settle somewhere.. After this when combine came to earth they enslaved like 65% of vortigaunt population, now they are in eyes MPF marionette to do dirty job. In eyes rebel - Usefull and helpfull partner to survive against combine.



Do a little RP with /me's of what a Vortigaunt does:
MPF-GRID-05: You biotic, come with me !
Vortigaunt:/me After looks in glowing eyes metro police, gets a bit scared, then saids "Yes, master"
MPF-GRID-05: Now, clear amputation room from ugly citizens blood.
Vortigaunt: /me Nods, then grab rubber and cleanes a chair from blood and nearest ground.
*it*: after 10 minutes....
MPF-GRID-05: Good work biotic, it seem keeping you alive was a good idea.
Vortigaunt: /me chuckles then saids: Thank you my lord.


Vortigaunt start type: Enslaved
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Post by Saburo on Wed May 22, 2013 7:28 am

English is not this guys forte. Very Happy

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Post by PachewPie on Wed May 22, 2013 7:36 am

Changed my mind to -1 because of the reasons of JPlus


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Post by JPlus on Wed May 22, 2013 10:56 am

Oh dear god, my inner Grammar Nazi is unleashing. I can see English is clearly not your first language, very likely it's not any of them as well. Aside from all this, -1 because:
- Your /me use is not detailed enough, you have not shown you understand how a Vortigaunt talks, acts, behaves, it's roles on BOTH sides, and how it would use it's powers.
- A Vortigaunt would never say "my lord", chuckle, or be called a "biotic".
- A Combine will NEVER congratuate a Vortigaunt. The Vortigaunt lives to work in this condition. The Combine will instead point them to their next job.
- Never seen you on.

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Post by Grammar Nazi on Wed May 22, 2013 11:54 am

-1, Holy shit man grammatical errors EVERYWHERE and the /me situation is too short.

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Post by Niebianski on Wed May 22, 2013 4:15 pm

So, you -supporting this, becouse i writed it in bad grammar ?
Come on, i don't like making essay, and writing this took me like hour.
You could give me chance cause i'm trying to be online as possible.

JPlus - combine calling vortigaunts as biotics.
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Post by JPlus on Wed May 22, 2013 5:20 pm

If you look at my post, you'll see I never -Supported because of grammar. As much as I should, since this IS an English server, I haven't.
I haven't seen anyone call a Vortigaunt a "biotic". Maybe on another server, but never seen it done here.

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Jack Wedgwood [Citizen - HL2RP] - Ran away from the city while the Resistance were fighting the Combine.
Robert Maine [Citizen - HL2RP] - Ran in said firefight with unconscious wife in arms.
C45/C18.MpF.ZONE-05.41222 [MPF - HL2RP] - Tired of never getting noticed, quit his job.
Ja'Rak'Shan [Vortigaunt (Freed) - HL2RP] - Teleported away.

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Post by Niebianski on Thu May 23, 2013 1:24 am

I don't mean you JPlus but people like Oyster, Pachewpie.

I'm going fix soon this app to looks better.

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Post by Sloth the Wizard on Thu May 23, 2013 4:13 am

-1 Denied
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